Sales companies should recruit people who are hungry for money as they will make the most dedicated workers. Do you think money is the driving force behind hard work?

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I completely agree that marketing and sales oriented organisations should hire individuals with s
trong desire
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a strong desire
to make huge amount of
money
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and definitely they will turn into the most efficient workers
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interpersonal skills and academic qualification should
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be given an equal importance while selecting sales representatives
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is undeniable that people who have a longing for
money
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work
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their socks off and
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have the potential to bring prosperity to the
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they
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in
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Likewise
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any sale officer who wants to make
money
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and know that he would get some incentives if he manages to sale maximum amount of products, he would not only
work
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with full dedication and devotion but
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try his level best to maximise the sales of the
company
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He would try his level best to persuade the customer to buy the product of his
company
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I think that behind hard
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there a
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has always been
a lust of generating revenue
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having an ambition f
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of
earning more
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here are other attributes that should be taken into account while the recruitment of salespersons
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Firstly
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interpersonal skills should
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be given priority like confidence and self assurance
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A confident and self assured salesman would easily tempt his customers to buy a certain product even if it is out of their budget
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academic qualification should never be looked down upon
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Individuals with d
egree
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a degree
degrees
in marketing and an e
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exception
hold on linguistics could be really beneficial for a sales job as they will apply their knowledge t
o market
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to marketing
the product
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well qualified
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confident and self assured individual should be selected for a sales job
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To recapitulate
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although
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money
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is the driving force that led people to
work
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very hard for their organisation
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in order to increase the sales of any
company
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above mentioned qualities should
also
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be considered whilst the selection of a sales p
ersonal
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person
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intrinsic motivation
  • Extrinsic motivation
  • Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs
  • Basic needs
  • High-level motivations
  • Job satisfaction
  • Working environment
  • Growth opportunities
  • Work-life balance
  • Monetary rewards
  • Employee turnover rates
  • Productivity
  • Short-term motivator
  • Long-term dedication
  • Sense of purpose
  • Personal growth
  • External rewards
  • Internal satisfaction
  • Fulfilment
  • Professional fulfilment
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