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The consumption of the world resources such as oil or water is increasing at a dangerous rate What are causes and solutions ?

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Some scientists say that if people go on consuming natural resources
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at
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 it could be very dangerous to the future of humanity and There are several reasons why
daily
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the daily consumption
consumption
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 of natural resources
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 oil or
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 has been increased dramatically
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some
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Some
 world organizations are seeking solutions to
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 problem.
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 of all urbanization is the main reason and the number of people in some countries has been increased by three or four times than before
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It
 goes without saying
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 their daily
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 is based on the
water
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 and oil resources has
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 raised dramatically
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On
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 occasion what should we to decrease daily
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 rate
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 Of course it is high time for humanity to change their daily consumptions on natural resources with renewable ones.
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 to the problem that I mentioned above in world countries have gigantic factories which use more natural resources rather than people and it causes some serious problems
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 they consume fresh
water
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 and emission rubbish to rivers and oceans as
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a result
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
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 creatures are suffering.
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 that motorcars on the roads of worldwide are consuming more petroleum and gases which can be harmful to our health and to decrease some bad sides of
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 situation we have to use less harmful transport means
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 as public transport or cars which runs on electricity. As a
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conclusion, I
 think that we should save the natural resources to our generation and of course they
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 have rights to use them like us. As well as we must decrease our daily
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 and oil
consumption
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instead
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 of using them useless.

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