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Some employees want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that different employers have different approaches when managing their employees. It has become questionable if contacting their staff when they are not on duty has more merits than demerits. In my opinion, I believe that
this
 development is more disadvantageous, especially to employees and I will discuss
this
 in the essay. Discussing the advantages, it might instill a sense of belonging in workers.
This
 is because they feel that their employer is concerned about their
welfare
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welfare, hence
hence
this
 will motivate them at work
thus
 increasing productivity which will result in the company's competence.
For
example if
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example, if
 an employee is on sick leave, calling them may even allow
then
objective case of they
them
 to recover quickly. If these managers fail to get in touch with their employees,
this
 might reduce their
(
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(
employees
Suggestion
employee
) morale. Moving on to disadvantages,
this
 might make workers resentful as they might feel controlled even when at home. To elaborate, employees enjoy resting when they are on vacation without any interruptions from
work
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work, hence
hence
 contacting them frequently might make them feel disrespected and deprived of their freedom.
Moreover
,
this
 I
also
 a disadvantage because they will be disturbed from their family
time which
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time, which
 they do not get due to work pressures.
For example
, if a worker is having a family dinner and his/her boss calls,
this
 disrupts everything. In conclusion, it is very evident that there are more
repurcussions
a remote or indirect consequence of some action
repercussions
 in contacting employees when they are off duty
such
 as depriving them of their family time and not giving them enough time to rest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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