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The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The bar graph depicts the different
sectors
contributed
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 to
Indian
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the Indian
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economy
 in the year 1950, 1960 and 1970. Where, the
sectors
 are Industries,
self employment
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self-employment
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,
Service
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the Service
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sector
 and Agriculture. Industries
economy
 in the year 1950 was 20%,
were
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where
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 it rose to 27% in 1970 and fell to 17% in 1990 which has
sudden
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a sudden
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 dip of 10% in
20years
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20 years
.
Self employment
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economy
 was least among all the
sectors
 in the year 1950, It
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increased to 25% from 7% which is a major boom in 1970, and it followed the same rise and hiked to 37% in 1990 stood as
a
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 greatest
sector
 in Contribution.
Although
,
Service
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the Service
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sector
 had 27% of
economy
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the economy
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 in 1950 it
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decreased to 23% in 1970,
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followed
the
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 same fall in 1990
to
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, which is just 7%. It
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experienced the greatest fall between 1970 and 1990 compared to other
sectors
. Agriculture was the biggest
sector
 in contributing
economy
 in 1950which was 35%, It
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also
 decreased to 18% in 1970 and to 10% in 1990.
Overall
, Industries fluctuated from 20% to 18% it was steady,
although
,
Self employment
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Self-employment
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 hiked from 7% to 36% which was a major rise among all
sectors
, Service
sector
 and Agriculture
sector
 fell from a high contribution to
low
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a low
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 between 1950 and 1990.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, economy, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sectoral contribution
  • economic base
  • industrialization
  • service-oriented economy
  • diversified economy
  • agriculture sector
  • industrial sector
  • services sector
  • economic policy
  • dominant sector
  • fluctuation
  • transition
  • shift
  • steady increase
  • decreasing trend
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