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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently, there is a belief
by
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of
 people that developing new friendships using social networking and group online chatting is good while others think that face-to-face
communication
 is much more important. In my opinion, making friends through social networks and online chats is good in our society
today but
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today, but
 being able to communicate with them in
person
 is important in developing trust. On the one hand, social media,
such
 as Facebook and Instagram, in modern society, plays an integral role in every human being’s
lives
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life
. They use it to show people what happened to them recently through photos; post a quote that shares how they are currently feeling; and message new people that they are interested in. Making friends through social networks and internet chat groups make it easier for people to
communicate especially if
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communicate, especially if
 their interests are uncommon.
For example
, a
person
 from the Philippines who is interested in anime,
also
 known as Japanese animation which is enjoyed by a select few, may not be able to find somebody in his area who have similar interest;
however
, he is able to find a group online, or meet a
person
in
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on
 Facebook that enjoys anime too. In
this
 way, one can say that it is better for some people to be able to communicate through social media and online chats than not communicating with anyone at all.
On the other hand
,
communication
 in the form of face-to-face is important too.
In other words
, it is a must for a
person
 to be able to talk to another by physically meeting with them. Based on a research done by high school students from Ateneo de Iloilo, people preferred to talk in
person especially
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person, especially
 if they need to share something
that is
 private. So, when a
person
 talks to somebody he can see, they will develop rapport with that
person
 because they are assured that the
person
 they are talking to is real.
Finally
, because there are people that are better at communicating through online chats, making new friends across the world through social media is good. People that are considered as introverts are not good at socializing in
person but
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person, but
 excel
with
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in
 the use of technology. As a
person
 that advocates technology, being able to use the social media and the internet as a means of
communication
 is a positive step towards a better future.
However
, developing In conclusion,
although
 there are people who believe that
communication
 should be done in
person
, social networking and online group chatting are beneficial means of communicating
too as
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too, as
 it offers people from different parts of the world to become friends.
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