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The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
#show #percentage #food #budget #restaurant #meals #different #years #restaurants
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The given line graphs
shows
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 the number of
meals
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 against the fast
food
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 and
sitdown
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 restaurant for the time period of four years. In overview, both fast
food
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 and
sitdown
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meals
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 started with the same number but fast
food
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meals
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 increased sharply in each
next
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year
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.
On the other hand
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,
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sitdown
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sit-down
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 restaurant
meals
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also
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 progressed but
its
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their
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 speed was
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more steadily
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steadily
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 than the fast foods.
Firstly
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,
the
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apply
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fast
food
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meals
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 started with the number of 20
meals
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 per
year
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 in 1970. In the
next
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year
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, it jumped to 30
meals
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. In the
next
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 two years,
it’s
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 jumped very sharply
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such
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as
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at
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 55
meals
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 in 1990 and 80
meals
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 in 2000. On the
second
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 side, the
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sitdown
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sit-down
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 restaurant
meals
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also
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 grow
in
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apply
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every
next
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year
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 but
its
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their
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growing
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growth
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 speed was
slow
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slower
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 than
the
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apply
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fast
food
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meals
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. It started
from
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with
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 20
meals
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 per
year
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 in 1970, which reached
to
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apply
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35
meals
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 in 1980.
However
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, in the
last
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 two years, its ratio was quite similar
such
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 as 43 and 45
meals
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 per
year
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 in 1990 and 2000 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, next, such".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, food, sitdown, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage of food budget
  • Fast food restaurants
  • Sit-down restaurants
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Rise in popularity
  • Gradual rise
  • Cultural factors
  • Economic growth
  • Busy lifestyles
  • Changing societal norms
  • Proliferation
  • Casual dining experiences
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