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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Population
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The population
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 has been a tremendous factor in a country’s development.
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A summary
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 of Japan’s
population
in
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earlier, now and in future has been provided.
This
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about
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the variations in japans
population
in
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at
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 different timescales. The crowd level of the country is least in past with only about 84.1
million
 people and there is an extensive increase
of
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in
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population
 between 1990 to 2015 with
less
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 deviations. The elevated level of people was from 123.6 to 125.4
million
 in
25years
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25 years
.the
population
 shows
sudden
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a sudden
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 drop of
15million
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15 million
 persons
at
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in
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 2035.
After
this
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 the
population
 tend to decrease to
89.9million
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89.9 million
 almost similar to the earlier 1950s. The data showed
percentage
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the percentage
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 of people aged
65years
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65 years
 or over is 4.9%
withy
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with
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 4.1
million
 headcounts in 1950 and there will be a dramatic uplift to 41% in future with
36.5million
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36.5 million
 champs. The
population
 increase could lead to increased demands for food and other resources.
This
 can be controlled by birth control measures that should be taken by the government.
To conclude
 Japan’s
population
 will be extending in upcoming years and measures
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 to be carried out to control it.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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