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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999
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This
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the divergent levels of after-school qualifications in
Austraila
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Australia
 and the
proportion
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 of
males
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 and
females
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 who held them in 1999.
This
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 is a static chart which describes post-school degrees
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 sex.Men have the highest level
in
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 skilled vocational
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diploma
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diplomas
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.
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,the lowest level of
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also
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 can be found in
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 aspect.
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,the best result for women is undergraduate
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unlike
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males
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. In 1999, skilled vocational
diploma
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 contains approximately 20% of women,but 90% of
males
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have
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qualified from
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 section.In
undergraduate
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the undergraduate
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diploma
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 part,
females
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 have about 70%
proportion
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 contrary
of
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 men's 40% success.
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males
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.
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,feminine power shows itself in
bachelor's
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a bachelor's
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degree
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degrees
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 too.In
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 part, both of these sexes are almost equal and the
proportion
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 is about 50%.Master's
degree
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degrees
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 and postgraduate
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diploma
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diplomas
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 are totally different.Because
,
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in postgraduate
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diploma
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,diploma
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females
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 have 30% and
males
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 have 70%
proportion
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.In master's degree indicator
which
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shows female rates
incrasing
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increasing
contrary
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in contrary
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of
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 men.The final line demonstrates
40
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a 40
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%
proportion
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 for
females
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 and approximately 60% for
males
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, males, females, diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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