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Nowadays some employers why looking for new employees think that formal academic qualification are more important than life experience or personal qualities what are the reasons for this changing trend is this a positive or a negative development

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There is no iota of doubt that companies are hiring academically qualified employees.
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phenomena, offering
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having many aspects
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 benefits to people
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however sometimes
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however, sometimes
 a couple of
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problems
 emerge due to some reason. The following paragraph woodshed light on both the pros and cons.
To begin
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first notion
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the first notion
 that, today's society e hire the employees who is good in academic qualification.
Firstly
, they thought that qualified person can do stop the company development.
Secondly
,
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the youngster
a youngster
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has
 great knowledge about the newly introduced gadgets.
Also
 in schooling time they got the proper education for the more these
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types
 of staff are most trustworthy in terms of the level of education they have received they got the training from the training centre how to work with the team. On the flip side of
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, experienced person have not knowledge about the latest
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education, but
 experienced workers have
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 valuable information from their previous mistakes.
For instance
, if company facing the serious crisis experience worker solve the issue with the help of work experience. In conclusion, I personally believe that IT companies want to develop they have to hire both the academic and experienced employee.
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