The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first graph shows that 80% of
students
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under the
age
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of 26
years
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study
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for
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career
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a career
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,
while
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an average of 20%
study
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for
interest
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. 70% of
students
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between
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ages
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the ages
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26 to 29
study
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for
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career
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a career
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, with a little above 10% motivated to
study
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for
interest
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. There is a significant decline in the
study
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for
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a career
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career
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careers
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between
ages
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30 to 39
years
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, with a percentage between 50 to 60% but a slight
interest
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between 20 to 30% is shown in
this
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age
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bracket.
Students
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between
ages
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40 to 49
years
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have 40% to
study
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for
career
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and
interest
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,
while
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students
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above
age
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49
study
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more for
interest
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(70%), against
career
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, which is between 10 to 20%. The
second
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paragraph shows that employers of
students
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under 26
supports
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support
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the
students
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with time off and school fees,
while
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the support drops to 50% for
students
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between
ages
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26 to 29.
Students
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between
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the age
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age
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ages
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30 to 39 have 30 to 40% support from their employers,
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students
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between
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ages
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the ages
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40 to 49.
Students
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over 49
years
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have
a
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apply
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relatively high support from their employers, which is slightly above 40%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, age, years, study, career, interest, ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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