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Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

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The given charts illustrate the approximate percentages in common
meals
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meal's
 nutrients with three types. If it
eaten
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ate
 too much may be unhealthy.The three nutrients include
sodium
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,
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,
 saturated fat and added sugar.
This
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 data is from the USA. As can be seen from the charts, the
first
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 one shows the average percentage of
sodium
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 in meals.43%
sodium
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is typically using
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typically uses
 at
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dinner but
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dinner, but
 it
use less
having no beneficial use or incapable of functioning usefully
useless
 at breakfast and
snack
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.Which is around 14% each
.
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.
On the Other hand
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,
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,
saturated fat is
using
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used
 quite
high
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higher
 in
snack
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 and breakfast than
sodium
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 intake which is around 21% and 16% respectively. 26% of saturated fat adds everyday lunch.
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, it uses less at
dinner
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 by
comparing
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compared
 to
sodium
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.
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, 42% of added sugar consume in
snack
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 and it's so high as
comparison
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compared
 to
sodium
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 and saturated fat.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 nutrient consume less at lunch and
dinner
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 by illustrating with
first
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 two nutrients. Overall
,
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,
 it can be said that
sodium
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 uses high at
dinner
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 and lunch.
whereas
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Whereas
 added sugar is
consume
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consumed
 in
snack
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 with
high percentage
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high percentages
a high percentage
.

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