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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The diagram indicates the amounts of
electricity
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 that the top ten countries produce and consume in 2014.
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China
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 produced and used
electricity
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 the most, and the United States was in
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second
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 place.
Republic
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 of Korea was the least in the top ten, more than ten times
than
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China
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. We can
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 that the top three countries were
China
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,
United
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 States and Russia. The amounts of
electricity
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 in production and consumption were both over 5000
billion
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kWh
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 in
China
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, and the United States had about 1000
billion
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kWh
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 less than
China
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. Russia had a similarity amounts in generating and using
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electricity
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 to Japan and India, in the range of 700 to 1000
kWh
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. From
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sixth place to
the
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tenth place, the production of
electricity
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 in France, Brazil and Germany
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 alike, and Canada was a little more than them, which was 618.9
billion
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kWh
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,
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea was the least. Turning to the usage of
electricity
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, those five countries did not have obvious differences, but Germany consumed the most, which was 582.5
billion
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kWh
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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