Child development can be defined as physical ,mental, psychological and intellectual growth with the influence of multi factors such as environment, resources, society and family. Few people believe that major causes influencing kinder's growth are mass medias, friends and music. Eventually other group of people consider that parents and relatives are the major aspects of the child development. This essay goes through the details of both views.

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On the one hand, in the new era the kinder are influenced by television. Television operators provide various categories of programs like entertainment, science, health, sports, education

etcetera

. Now days major number of children are spending more time in front of television. They are attracted towards various colours, sounds and people. Children try to imitate the characters in the programs.

For instance

the recent study says that, kinder

are

Suggestion

more active, meticulous and enthusiastic than ancient generation.

On the other hand

, parents and relatives play a vital role in the

development

children

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children, such

such

a way that, they live with kinder and will give

prior

Suggestion

priority

attention and focus of the matters

such

as good habits like personal

development

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

, cultural beliefs and intellectual learning. Children have been with

family

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the family

for a long duration and during

this

time they

widely experiencing

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are widely experienced

are widely experiencing

the religious and cultural customs.

As a result

, the children are achieving essential knowledge to lead

this

arduous life. In conclusion, I believe that environmental factors which play a vital role in the

development

of children. The child

development

is not a spontaneous process. It influenced by many aspects and the parents are much concerned about the milestones of their children.

Hence parents

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Hence, parents

try to maximize the facilities and full fill their essential minor and major needs.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

217 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Science is important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and in the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important to be shared freely.

television sporting show such as olympics motivate the youth who do not like to exercise much .DO YOU AGREE or disagree ? include relevant examples in your answer and provide your own opinion?

Some people think that to learn a second language well, it is necessary to live in the country where that language is spoken. What is your opinion about this?