Child development can be defined as physical ,mental, psychological and intellectual growth with the influence of multi factors such as environment, resources, society and family. Few people believe that major causes influencing kinder's growth are mass medias, friends and music. Eventually other group of people consider that parents and relatives are the major aspects of the child development. This essay goes through the details of both views.

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On the one hand, in the new era the kinder are influenced by television. Television operators provide various categories of programs like entertainment, science, health, sports, education
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. Now days major number of children are spending more time in front of television. They are attracted towards various colours, sounds and people. Children try to imitate the characters in the programs.
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the recent study says that, kinder
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am
more active, meticulous and enthusiastic than ancient generation.
On the other hand
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, parents and relatives play a vital role in the
development
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of
children
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children, such
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a way that, they live with kinder and will give
prior
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priority
attention and focus of the matters
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as good habits like personal
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,
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, cultural beliefs and intellectual learning. Children have been with
family
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the family
for a long duration and during
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time they
widely experiencing
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are widely experienced
are widely experiencing
the religious and cultural customs.
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, the children are achieving essential knowledge to lead
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arduous life. In conclusion, I believe that environmental factors which play a vital role in the
development
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of children. The child
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is not a spontaneous process. It influenced by many aspects and the parents are much concerned about the milestones of their children.
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Hence parents
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Hence, parents
try to maximize the facilities and full fill their essential minor and major needs.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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