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When the time comes to commence full-time employment, individuals who have graduated from university deserve a higher salary than those who have not. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Now a day's competition of getting into a good college has increased and after passing out the fight to get employment is even more competitive.Graduates from good institute often demand high salaries as they are passed from
one
 of the best colleges, some people believe that they should get more salary whereas some believe that it is the quality of
education
 witch matters. In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will present both sides of views and conclude by presenting my views on the same. It is always believed that
one
 can get better
education
 only by studying in
one
 of the best universities which is true if look into the people who are at the top position
for example
 CEO of Google Mr. Sundar Pichai he has completed his
education
 from IIT which is
one
 of the best colleges in India.
Also
 If we look into the top B-Schools like IIMs the average package which students get is around 20-22lpa; though it's not easy to get into these top colleges
one
 needs to be best in it. Contrary to
this
 there are many big shots who are at the leading position without even completing their
education
Accept comma addition
education, for
for example
 Facebook CEO Mark Zuckerburg or Microsoft CEO Mr.Bill Gates, but still holding the best position for their companies. I strongly believe more than the university name its the quality of
education
 which matters a lot.
One
 might get into
best college
Suggestion
the best college
, but what if after going there doesn't studying
then
 in that case you will not have a proper knowledge but still
one
 is from best collage should get a better
salarysalary
Suggestion
salary salary
 than the
one
 who is fantastic in their subject but is from average college?? I don't
this
 so. To summarize, I strongly believe it should the quality which should matter rather than the tag, as with tag there could be
possibility
Suggestion
a possibility
the possibility
 that the candidate might not deserve the best salary.

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