The chart below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The charts show the proportions of British
students
at a University in England who can speak other languages as a secondary
language
in
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the year
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year
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years
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that
the
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most of the
students
have
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preferred to speak
Spanish
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the Spanish
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language
in both years. As per observation, in
year
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2000, there are 20%
people
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of people
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who
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know no other languages
while
in 2010
this
ratio
has
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decreased and became the least among all.
Similarly
, in the case of French as a secondary
language
, it reduced by 5% in 2010 and reached 10%, which is exactly the same as
German
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the German
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language
in 2010 and 2000. There are some
students
who have the skills to speak two other languages and as per the
charts
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,charts
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this
kind of interest has developed with time and reached 15% in 2010. The majority of the
students
speak
Spanish
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the Spanish
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language
as there is
also
a marginal increment in numbers: 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010. One out of three
students
have
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preferred to speak another
language
in both
the
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years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic competence
  • significant
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • popularity
  • relatively
  • decade
  • compare/contrast
  • survey
  • data
  • fluent
  • proficient
  • bilingual
  • predominant
  • minority
  • emerge
  • dwindle
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