The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates the steps of a
food
manufacturing process in America.
Overall
, America's
food
production is a
six stage
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process that begins with the shipment of cattle as the source of meat and
finally
produced
the
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beef
food
product for human consumption at home and
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restaurant
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. First of all, the cow is delivered by ship
in
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the
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production where the barn is available for the cow storage, shelter, and feeding. After that, the processing takes place for the cow slaughter and
producing
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the meat
and
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is
subsequently
cut into the desired sizes and meat product standard. From
this
, the ingredients and spices are added to taste before the processed foods are ready for packaging. Following that, the processed
beef
products are stored in the distribution building as a buffer zone ready for transport.
Next
to that,
beef
food
products are transported to the retail outlet and
restaurant
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wherein the
food
chefs cooked the delicious
beef
dish.
Finally
, people either in the home or in the restaurant enjoyed eating the variety of
beef
dishes.
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