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People today are able to take out loans from the bank or get a credit card very easily. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this practice?

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The illustration shows the
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 by which plants are able to produce food. Plants require input from four different sources to produce the sugars that are needed.
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, the roots absorb water. Added to
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, the plant is able to convert sunlight into energy needed for the
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 to be able to take place.
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, carbon dioxide is taken from the atmosphere through the leaves.
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 come the minerals which are extracted from the soil through the roots. When combined, these four factors allow the plant to produce sugar, which is
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 converted into starch and stored in the leaves and the stem until required, when it is used for growth and repair of damaged leaves, stems or roots. A byproduct of
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 is the conversion of carbon dioxide to oxygen, which is released into the air. Overall, the
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 requires four elements to function, and in turn produces two different effects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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