Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparson

Some people The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparson
The given tabular graphs represent the proportion of British
students
who can speak other languages apart from English, at one university in England, in the
year
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years
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2000 and 2010.
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passage will highlight on main features. In
these
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graphs
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graph
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students
are divided into 6 different types,
Such
as
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students
who speak only one
language
that is
French, Spanish or German and
Student
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Students
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who can speak another,
two
other or even no other
language
. In
year
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the year
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2000,
Student
who speak only
German
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the German
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language
and
student
who speak
two
other languages
is
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given
same
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the same
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as
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10%,
whereas
students
who can speak only French and
students
who can speak another
language
is given to be 15%.
Remaining
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The remaining
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two
are
students
who speak no other
language
which is about 20% and
language
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the language
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that is
spoken mostly by
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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is Spanish which is about 30%. In comparison to 2000,
percentage
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the percentage
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given for each type has changed a lot. As we see
this
year,
student
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a student
the student
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who speaks No other
language
and French has shrunk to 10% each from 20% and 15%. The German
language
is spoken equally by 10%
students
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of students
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.
Whereas
,
students
who speak
two
other languages, Another
language
and Spanish
language
have increased from 10%, 15% and 30% to 15%, 20% and 35% respectively.

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