The graph on the right shows the unemployment figures amongst women of different age groups.

The graph shows percentages of unemployed women at 8 ages. It can be clearly seen that the
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Ages
ages
18 and 45 have the highest
unemployment
rate. According to the graph, among the ages 18, 20, 25, 30 and 35, the youngest women have the
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Highest
highest
unemployment
percentage (15%). 20 year-old women have much lower
unemployment
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Figures
figures
(about 10%), and percentages drop even lower (to 5 percent) for those aged 25 and 35. There is a slight increase
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in
for
those aged 30, where the
unemployment
rate reaches 6 percent. The peak value is recorded amongst 45 year-old women, and all the remaining ages have much
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Lower
lower
figures: 8% at age 55 and 9% at age 65. To sum up, the figures for most ages are relatively uniform and change from 5 to 9 %, with rare
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Exceptions
exceptions
such
as the ages 18 and 45.

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