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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shows below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shows below.
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One study about the fast
food
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 in Britain was focus in two topic: the first part showed the amount of money per
week
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 that british people spent in junk
food
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, and
on the other hand
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 the investigation showed the trends of
consumption
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 in fast
food
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. The research split the amount of money per
week
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 in three kind of social income: high, average and low, where the investigation figure out that the high income spent 45 pounds per
week
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, and the low income waste 7 pounds per
week
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.
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, the study showed that fast
food
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 most popular
consumption
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 was hamburger and the pizza was chose like the fewer favorite. Beside, the study show the habits of
consumption
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 of fast
food
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 in three decades (1970-1990), where the investigation reveals that fish and chips have been decresse their
consumption
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 and the hamburger and pizza have been increese their popular in the people in Britain.
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 the favorite fast
food
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 in Britain is Hamburger, because the people in 1990
consumption
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 500 grammes.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, week, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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