Many parents are unhappy with the amount of violence in video games, television programs, and other leisure activities. How harmful could this be to children? What could be done to solve this problem?

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entertaining
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content shown by these new gadgets has changed which results in
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a negative impact
negative empact
negative impact
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on the growth of children
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parents are more worried about the roughness shown by
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programmes
telecasted on
television
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movies
such
gangster basis which shows various stents
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as the end result of a succession or process
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children try to
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reproduce someone's behavior or looks
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and become more aggressive
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games in today
time
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some of the games affects the behaviour of the children as they spend most of their
time
on playing games and become
adducted
compulsively or physiologically dependent on something habit-forming
addicted
to them and ultimately it results in to
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a symptom of reduced quality or strength
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their mental
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act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
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development
of the children.
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there are various alternatives. Parents should put
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for them or not
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in outdoor activities for their physical
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development
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government
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the government
should ban the violence related
telecaste
a television broadcast
telecast
shown by the
television
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having or appealing to those having worldly knowledge and refinement and savoir-faire
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a serious effect
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serious effects
on the growth of the children
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parents
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a serious concern
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