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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
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 five levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the
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 of men and women who get that score in 1999.
Overall
, the man who was in
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 vocational diploma had
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 grades with almost 90%,
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 the woman who was in the same program had
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 score by nearly 10
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.
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, the post-school that was better qualifications
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 females was
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 diploma with close to 70%,
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had
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 marks
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 males.
On the other hand
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 the chart, in bachelor’s degree, both gender had likely qualifications with a proportion of almost 50%.
Finally
, the information shows that
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 postgraduate
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 and master’s degree man achieve best marks than
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women
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 by under 70% and less than 60% respectively ,
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 female
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in
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 that program
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 30% and
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slightly
 under 40%, approximately.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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