A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The involvement of
government's
Suggestion
the government's
and the private sectors in the development of a country are becoming more and more popular globally. There is
common conception
Suggestion
a common conception
that the ruling party of a country should take care of matters
such
as national security, infrastructure
development
Accept comma addition
development, such
such
as electricity and water and services
such
as
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
and education must be overseen by the private sector. I completely disagree with
this
argument, as I believe all of the above stated are matters of the
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
. Privately
organisations
true
puporse
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
purpose
is to make profits rather than serving
community
Suggestion
the community
.
In other words
, we are all aware that privately-run schools and hospitals are highly successive.
However
, the costs involved with these private
organisations
to receive a medical treatment or a higher education
is
Suggestion
are
significantly higher when compared to state-run
organisations
.
Hence
, allowing private individuals or companies and giving them authority to perform education and healthcare sector in a national level would pose a major risk
for
Suggestion
to
the people, as they would run these
organisations
only with a business
puporse
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
purpose
purposes
in mind and
as a result
, financially deprived individuals may never get the opportunity to have access to these services.
Therefore it
Accept comma addition
Therefore, it
is vital that governments who are elected by the people should be serving these services.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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