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You applied to a job, were offer the position but have decided not to accept the offer Write a letter to hr supervisor with whom you interviewed in your letter: Explain the reason why you are declining the offer Describe your reasons for staying with your current position Express your gratitude.

#job #offer #position #hr #supervisor #reason #gratitude
Dear Mr
barry
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Barry
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, I am writing
this
 letter to say thank you that you have
recurited
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recruited
 me and
had
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having
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 face-to-face communication, but sorry to say that
i
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I
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 feel reluctant to start
job
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a job
the job
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 in your
reputated
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reputed
 company the reason is my father is
admitt
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admitted
admit
in
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to
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 hospital, so every day after the office ,
i
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I
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ahave
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have
 to go there to look after him and it is not easy to go from your location
Probinh
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Probing
further
,
i
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I
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 feel
honnered
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honoured
 to tell you that my company increased my wages
as well as
 they gave the insurance to my whole family, so that,
company
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 is paying the hospital bills for my father,
hence
,
i
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I
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 decided to remain my job at
this
 position with
this
 organization.
Moreover
,I cannot express my sentiments in words when you offered me
this
 job and sent me the notification for
interview
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an interview
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. And the questioning about
kob
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Kob
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 was
the
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a
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 productive experience for me and was so professional, especially with you.
At
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In
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 the end,
i
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I
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 would say , in future,
i
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I
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 will look forward to your organization and will
have
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make
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 effective decisions with your team
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Thank you
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Ensure to maintain a professional tone throughout the letter and improve coherence and cohesion by organizing your ideas logically and linking your sentences and paragraphs more effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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