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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think it is good, others think face to face interaction is essential.

#people #friends #networks #internet #chat #groups #face #interaction
*these days individual
make
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makes
 new friends with the help of
world wide web
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the world wide web
 and chat
group
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groups
,
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,
many people ponder that it is
good way
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a good way
 to make a
friends
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friend
 or it think
face
 to
face
 attraction is essential.
this
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This
 both view have
there
of them or themselves
their
 own importance with
this
 essay will intends to describe *begining with
,
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,
there are many merits to make new friends through the internet.
First
 and major point, nowadays
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,
world wide web
is became
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has become
is becoming
becomes
 extremely fast as compare to
past
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the past
 and
also
plethero
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a plethora
plethora
 of application are launched like
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what app
,
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,
facebook
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Facebook
,
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,
instagram
,
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,
telegram so on.With the help of
this
 they can easy call as any far place.So they can call both video and voice call to anyone.
Moreover
,by using social application they can attact with all around the world to instance any foreign people so they can learn alots of their culture knowledge and language and
also
 they update with environment what ever happens in arounds due to the flow of social media if any incidents will happen they chronic they capture the news with video any circumstance will happen
as a result
,they easly get information regarding to any situation in free of cost *moving on other side, many people argue they must be avoid online system if they want to be update so they must be travel in one place to another place for make new friends as
face
 to
face
.
Firstly
 a person how want to make
friends they
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friends, they
 must be
attact
launch an attack or assault on; begin hostilities or start warfare with
attacked
 with each other to now about them because by doing
this
 they will gain
confidents
freedom from doubt; belief in yourself and your abilities
confidence
 and they never feel nervous again with people in the future.Consequence if
any time
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any, time
 that person going
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to
 interview for
job
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jobs
a job
 in
businessor
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business or
 any other group they never became introvert as well as nervous
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.
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my preso
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
nal opinion, the internet chat group ha
ve al
a large number or amount
lots
ots of demerits rath
er
conjunction used in comparatives
than
then
face
 to
face
 interaction
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