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the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British
students
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 speaking other languages than
English
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 in the frame of 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, from the
graphs
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 it can be understood that from 2000 to 2010 the percentage of British
students
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 able to speak Spanish, one or two languages
in addition
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 to
English
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 increased,
while
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 there were
less
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fewer
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students
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 speaking French or not able to speak
other language
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another language
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 than
English
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. In
details
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,
students
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 knowing Spanish made up the majority of all
students
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 both in 2000 and 2010, with an increase
by
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 5% (from 30% to 35%).
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, the portion of
students
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 learning one or two more languages rose slightly in that university (from 10% to 15% and from 15% to 20%
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).
By contrast
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, the percentage of British
students
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 able to speak French decreased by 5%.
Also
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, the number of
students
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 that were not able to speak any other language than
English
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 dropped as well. It is interesting to notice that the ratio of
students
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 speaking German remained the same,
with
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 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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