the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British

students

speaking other languages than

English

in the frame of 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, from the

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it can be understood that from 2000 to 2010 the percentage of British

students

able to speak Spanish, one or two languages

in addition

English

increased,

while

there were

less

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students

speaking French or not able to speak

other language

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another language

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than

English

. In

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students

knowing Spanish made up the majority of all

students

both in 2000 and 2010, with an increase

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5% (from 30% to 35%).

Moreover

, the portion of

students

learning one or two more languages rose slightly in that university (from 10% to 15% and from 15% to 20%

accordingly

By contrast

, the percentage of British

students

able to speak French decreased by 5%.

Also

, the number of

students

that were not able to speak any other language than

English

dropped as well. It is interesting to notice that the ratio of

students

speaking German remained the same,

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10%.

Tue Mar 17 2020

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the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

In some countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the internet?

The number of older people is increasing. Some people think that this will cause problems in their countries; others believe this group is important to society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

instead of requiring primary school students to do experiments themselves, schools should only alllow them to watch experiments demonstrated by teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?