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Some people like to work in small companies or businesses while others prefer working for large companies or government organizations. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for a large company or organization?

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Mentoring Social
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Mentoring, Social
 Entrepreneurs for Personal
Growth
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 Social entrepreneurship starts with the social entrepreneur. The best leaders know themselves
the best
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better
. And personal
growth
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 starts with self-awareness. I have several tools to help you to become more self-aware. True confession, I have struggled with
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 one myself, so I have a lot of practice at getting better at
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. Personal
growth
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 might
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 include self-management, our ability to manage our emotions and
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
; social awareness, our
impact
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 on others; and relationship management, the foundation of success in any initiative. Personal
growth
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 might
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 include learning new skills or gaining new confidence. d)
Mentoring Social
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Mentoring, Social
 Entrepreneurs for
Impact
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 Just as any
business
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 has to niche their market, social entrepreneurs must niche their
impact
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. While the UN Sustainable Development Goals are a great framework for thinking about development, not many social enterprises can “wipe out global poverty.” A lack of focus on specific, achievable
impact
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 goals can dilute your effectiveness. Sometimes social entrepreneurs need
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mentors
 to help them focus on one specific
impact
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 area and plan how to get there.
Mentoring Social
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Mentoring, Social
 Entrepreneurs for
Business
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Growth
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 Here’s the thing social entrepreneurs don’t often say out loud to others: If I’m worried about money, I can’t focus on my mission. I know we don’t always like talking about money, but the truth is, we need the dollars to make a difference. A social
business
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 is, in the end, a
business
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. Businesses survive and thrive from sustainable, profitable
growth
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. Social businesses have a social
impact
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 only when we sustain the
business
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, create profit and grow. Obviously, some nonprofits are doing well. And yet, they must grow a sustainable source of funding to create an
impact
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. So, in a sense, money and mission are never totally detached.
Mentoring Social
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Mentoring, Social
 Entrepreneurs for Leadership If you hope to scale your
impact
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, and
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 your
business
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, at some point you have to multiply your efforts by leading others. Communicating, coaching, creating the culture and other key skills
begin
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begins
 to take priority over your technical know-how. You must learn how to attract, recruit, grow, manage, motivate and lead others. I often see
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 as a bottleneck to
growth
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 for startups, moving from a team of cofounders to a team of teams.

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