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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and table illustrate the percentages of different export
products
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 in a country in 2015 and 2016 and it shows the
amount
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number
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 of changes
about
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in
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 export value in percentage during that duration,
However
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, each category
were
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was
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 included primary
products
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 or goods which
was
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were
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 measured in
billion
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 dollars.
Overall
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 as it can be seen, since 2015 the transport earnings have increased compared with 2016 except for gems and jewellery which had experienced
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a sharply
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sharply
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sharp
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 down to 5.81%.
Besides
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, two types of
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the category
a category
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category
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categories
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 (agricultural
products
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 and textiles) in 2015 in 31 and 26
billion
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, but in
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next
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the next
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 year have
steady
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a steady
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 up
to
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of
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 0.81% and 15.24%, respectively.
However
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, petroleum
products
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 experienced a rise
considering
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in
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 the previous year (2015)
about
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by about
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 3% (61 to 63
billion
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 dollars) and
on the other hand
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, engineered
products
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has
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have
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 massively changed to 8.5% (58 to 63
billion
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 dollars). Completely, in during one period could be observed about processes of export
products
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 and growing up to features than the past year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • percentage change
  • value
  • machinery
  • textiles
  • agricultural products
  • raw materials
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • sector
  • growth
  • decline
  • economic factors
  • market demand
  • trade policies
  • contribution
  • anomalies
  • unexpected findings
  • implications
  • economy
  • trade negotiations
  • export strategies
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