The charts below show proportion of British students at one university in England who able to speak other languages in addition English, In 2000 and 2010.
The given pie charts provide information about
proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
students
at a university in England that could speak other languages beside
English in two Replace the word
besides
difference
years.
In general, we can see that most Replace the word
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students
were able to speak Spanish at that university in 2000 and 2010. In addition
, we can also
view that less
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fewer
students
could speak in
two other languages.
Beginning with the German Change preposition
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language
, we can observe that knowledge of this
language
had increased by 5% from 2000 to 2010 at this
university. Moreover
, students
were able to progress their
Spanish Change preposition
in their
language
so that
the percentage of them had risen from 30% to 35% Correct word choice
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amongst
these years. It is Change preposition
in
also
worth noting that although
15 per cent of students
could speak French in the year 2000, in 2010 this
percentage went down to 0%.
Moving on to the no other language
part , we can witness that proportion
of students
who were not able to speak any language
beside
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besides
have
reduced from 20% to 10% between 2000 and 2010. Change the verb form
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Next
, when it comes to the
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another
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other
language
we can also
notice that proportion
of Correct article usage
the proportion
students
who could speak another language
have
increased from 15% to 20% within the decade. Change the verb form
has
Finally
, we can mention that proportion
of students
speaking two other languages had also
risen from 10% to 15% between 2000 and 2010.Submitted by mikayil.bayramov15 on
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