The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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group choosing labor
job in 2010.
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the number
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women from 15 to 44 Correct quantifier usage
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age
increased slowly around from 48 percent
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female
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the female
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when they are over 65 years old.
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, the percentage of boys from 15 to 34 years old dropped sharply around 11 Fix the agreement mistake
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