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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction

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It is true to say that today many people consider salary as the most primary aspect while choosing a
job
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.
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, I would agree th
ay
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that
they
job
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satisfaction
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 is much more significant irrespective of sa
larys i
something that remunerates
salary
mportance Some people think big salary is important to live in
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 competitive world, where things are very expensive.
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,"Money is ro
ot cause o
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the root cause
f all evil". When high pay scale is offered by employer's, along with it more responsibilities and targets needs to be achieved.
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,
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 pressure is developed because of which, the employee will have to
work
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 late during day hours, as well as, nights. Thereby, family relations are disrupted, as they will not be able to spend time together.
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, health is affected, due to increased workload and stress, as they will lack physical exercise and relaxation. Bank balance will increase, but there will be no time to spend the money
that is
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 earned.
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,
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Accept space
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b
satisfaction
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 plays a very important role in an individual life, because when people can be their happy their
work
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, they
work
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 efficiently and without any force. The atmosphere at wo
rkplace b
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the workplace
ecomes very pleasant, and it can easily lead to create team working skills and
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,t
h
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,
ey can achieve their goals with high success.
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,
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satisfaction
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 is more likely to im
prive t
to make better
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he growth at
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 since if people pay attention to hi
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higher
alary than
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satisfaction
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,t
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e growth at
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 can easily drop and many in
sesibilities o
a lack of sensibility
insensibilities
riginate
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 as people can not
work
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 by heart and do not come the
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 on a daily basis, that's why
job
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satisfaction
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 is an important in people's live In conclusion, money is not everything it only worsens our life, but when we are satisfied we make everyone around us happy.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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