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he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the change
of
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in
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population
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 between 2000 and 2050 in 2 countries, namely
China
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 and
India
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. In 2000, the
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number of
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apply
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population
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in
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apply
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China
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 was 1.25
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billions
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billion
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 and 1 billion in
India
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. 2020 saw an increase in
total
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a total
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number
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 of
population
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at
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1.35
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billions
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billion
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 in
India
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. There was
an
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 very slight increase
the
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in the
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number
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 of
population
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at
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apply
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1.425
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billions
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billion
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 in
China
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during
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from
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 2000 to 2020. 2030saw an increase in
total
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the total
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number
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 of
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a citizen
the citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 in
India
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 successively at 1.45
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billions
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billion
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 same
number
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 as
China
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.
During
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From
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 2030 to 2050, there are a steady decrease in the
number
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 of
Chinese
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a Chinese
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citizen
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citizens
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 and significant growth in the
number
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 of
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India
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Indian
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 people.
Population
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expected
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is expected
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 to
beyond
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be beyond
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China
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 in
India
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 after 2030,
both
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apply
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at 1.45
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billions
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billion
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. 1.6
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billions
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billion
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 of
population
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 and 1.4
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billions
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billion
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 of
population
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 will be expected in
India
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 and
China
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 respectively.
To sum up
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, over 50 years,
China
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 was going to rise
steady
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steadily
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its
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in its
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population
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 and
peck
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peak
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 in 2030.
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number
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the number
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is stably decrease
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is stably decreased
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 from 2030 to 2050 in
China
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.
However
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,
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population
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the population
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 is
an
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apply
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successively
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successive
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 growth in
India
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 over
duration
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the duration
a duration
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 of 50 years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, india, number, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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