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he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph shows the change
of
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in
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population
 between 2000 and 2050 in 2 countries, namely
China
 and
India
. In 2000, the
number of
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apply
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population
in
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apply
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China
 was 1.25
billions
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billion
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 and 1 billion in
India
. 2020 saw an increase in
total
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a total
the total
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number
 of
population
at
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apply
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1.35
billions
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billion
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 in
India
. There was
an
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a
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 very slight increase
the
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in the
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number
 of
population
at
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apply
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1.425
billions
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billion
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 in
China
during
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from
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 2000 to 2020. 2030saw an increase in
total
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the total
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number
 of
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a citizen
the citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 in
India
 successively at 1.45
billions
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billion
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 same
number
 as
China
.
During
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From
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 2030 to 2050, there are a steady decrease in the
number
 of
Chinese
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a Chinese
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citizen
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citizens
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 and significant growth in the
number
 of
India
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Indian
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 people.
Population
expected
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is expected
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 to
beyond
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be beyond
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China
 in
India
 after 2030,
both
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apply
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at 1.45
billions
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billion
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. 1.6
billions
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billion
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 of
population
 and 1.4
billions
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billion
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 of
population
 will be expected in
India
 and
China
 respectively.
To sum up
, over 50 years,
China
 was going to rise
steady
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steadily
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its
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in its
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population
 and
peck
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peak
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 in 2030.
number
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the number
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is stably decrease
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is stably decreased
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 from 2030 to 2050 in
China
.
However
,
population
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the population
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 is
an
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apply
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successively
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successive
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 growth in
India
 over
duration
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the duration
a duration
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 of 50 years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, india, number, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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