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Sales of Drinks January February March April Ice drinks 150150190230 Tea and Coffee 250270220180 Juices 200190210200 Cocktails 9090110100

The table gives information about monthly sales of drinks at small café from January to April. It is clear that
tea
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 and
coffee
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 have the largest number at 270 in February. We can
also
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 see that cocktails
are showed
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show
 the lowest number at 90 in January and February. Overall,
tea
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 and
coffee
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 and juices’ sales are noticeably higher in January at 250 and 200.
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But, ice
ice
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 drinks and cocktails are lower than them at 150 and 90. In February, changeability is not at
ice
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 drinks and cocktails.
Tea
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 and
coffee
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 have a slight rise
at
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in
of
 270. But juices decrease in 190.
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, demand on
ice
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 drinks, cocktails, juices increase in March at 190, 110, 210. It can be seen that the
proportion
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 of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 go down at 220. Only
ice
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 drinks
has
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have
 sharp rise at 230 in April. Out of the
ice
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 drinks, the rest of drinks have a slight increase
tea
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 and
coffee
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 at 180
,
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,
juices at 200, cocktails at 100. Overall,
tea
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 and
coffee
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 are nearly the highest
proportion
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 of sales. Cocktails are always lower
proportion
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 than the rest of
drinks
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the drinks
. The
proportion
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 of sales changes
into
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in
 seasonal condition.

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