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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

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It is considered that men and women are having some differences in terms of strength and weaknesses. I personally think these kind of differences should not let any male or female to be excluded from any sort of profession because of their
gender
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. I think that people should be employed in any position by their interest and their talent.
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,
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 is playing no role for any profession.
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, a woman can be employed in a space station if she has enough interest and talent by a good practice and teaching. So, practicing and preparing for the professions is more likely to be significant for any position rather than
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. According to many authority declarations, there are not only two
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gender
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genders
 available in human communities and it is contained more
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 and style.
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, people with bisexuality or transsexuality preferences. In our universe every life is precious and everyone should have a similar chance of living. In my opinion, anyone should freely choose their professional interests and try to compete with others to get the positions they want. Employers
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, should be more open minded and utilize everyone’s talent and experience without considering their
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. Because, some jobs or positions are assumed for men by default
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 as presidency of a country. People normally think that a woman may not be able to handle
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 position.
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, in my point of view we will never find-out if we never let a woman to become president of a country. Overall, I personally disagree with considering differences between men and women and I think the strength and weakness are not related to
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. People can improve their weaknesses by knowing and paying attention to them to increase their abilities. Another thing I can say is that team work can cover the weaknesses of employees and turn it to strength which is obvious in human social life.
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