Women and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

It is said that generally women and men have

strength

and

weakness

in

different way

Suggestion

different ways

a different way

, so it happens to be excluded

range

of jobs depending on

gender

.

However

, it is not

right

to do so because of

gender

. People ought to be free to choose which

kind

of jobs have because each

person

have

different unique

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different, unique

characteristic, and every single

person

have

human

Suggestion

the human right

a human right

right

to choose

role

what they really want to do.

Firstly

, people should not be excluded their

range

of choices because of

gender

, because it cannot be estimated exactly what is their

strength

or

weakness

only by

gender

.

For example

, even men, there are some people who are not strong enough compare to women.

On the other hand

, there are some women who are really good at beating strangers. The

ability

will depend on not

gender but

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gender, but

independence, so people should be evaluated by

ability

as one

person

.

Secondly

, each

person

should have

role

on what they really want to do or be because

everyone

has human

right

to choose what professions to be according skills.

For instance

, there were some stereotypes that women should have excluded works or staying at home until recent years.

However

, more and more people had been recognized that having

opportunity

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the opportunity

an opportunity

to be

professional

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professionally

or be what they want to be without being involved with

gender

is

usual thing

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a usual thing

nowadays. In conclusion, people should not be determined which professions have because of reasons that women or men. Because what

kind

of

ability

each

parson

a human being

person

have is

unmeasurable

impossible to measure

immeasurable

by

gender

trend, and people have a say in having options for

job

as much as they can because it is admitted as

obvious thing

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an obvious thing

for

everyone

. The more actions for equalization of

gender

be taken, the more people will be able to have

job

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jobs

that they like. p.15 TASK1

This

bar chart indicates that the rate of man and women teachers in each six educational phases of the UK in 2010. There is

big gap

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a big gap

of percentage between male and female teachers

for

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in

Nursery/

Pre-

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Preschool

school

and Primary

school

. Approximately 90%

is

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are

female and male is only 5%.

However

, the rate difference of each

gender

become

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becomes

smaller as grades up. Ultimately, nearly three times of men occupy the percentage of university. College is the only setting which male and female work equally in these six different settings. In case of men, the grade of education proceeds, the ratio of them

increase especially

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increase, especially

it hugely rise between primary

school

and secondary

school

.

On the other hand

, while

female

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the female

a female

have

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has

almost all of

rate

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the rate

until secondary

school

, it gets less and less since college. Overall, the chart shows that in 2010

of

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in

the UK, there are more women in primary educational settings and the opposite, men is in higher

educational

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education

situation. p.15 TASK2

writing

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Writing

task2 It is generally said that women and men have

strength

and

weakness

in

different way

Suggestion

different ways

a different way

, so it happens to be excluded

range

of jobs depending on

gender

.

However

, it is not

right

to do so because of

gender

. People ought to be free to choose which

kind

of jobs have because each

person

have

different unique

Accept comma addition

different, unique

characteristic, and every single

person

have

human

Suggestion

the human right

a human right

right

to choose

role

what they really want to do.

Firstly

, people should not be excluded their

range

of choices because of

gender

, because it cannot be estimated exactly what is their

strength

or

weakness

only by

gender

.

For example

, even men, there are some people who are not strong enough compare to women.

On the other hand

, there are some women who are really good at beating strangers. The

ability

will depend on not

gender but

Accept comma addition

gender, but

independence, so people should be evaluated by

ability

as one

person

.

Secondly

, each

person

should have

role

on what they really want to do or be because

everyone

has human

right

to choose what professions to be according skills.

For instance

, there were some stereotypes that women should have excluded works or staying at home until recent years.

However

, more and more people had been recognized that having

opportunity

Suggestion

the opportunity

an opportunity

to be

professional

Suggestion

professionally

or be what they want to be without being involved with

gender

is

usual thing

Suggestion

a usual thing

nowadays. In conclusion, people should not be determined which professions have because of reasons that women or men. Because what

kind

of

ability

each

parson

a human being

person

have is

unmeasurable

impossible to measure

immeasurable

by

gender

trend, and people have a say in having options for

job

as much as they can because it is admitted as

obvious thing

Suggestion

an obvious thing

for

everyone

. The more actions for equalization of

gender

be taken, the more people will be able to have

job

Suggestion

jobs

that they like.