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The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.
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This
 chart informs about the
contribution
 of three sectors ,agriculture, manufacturing and business, and financial services – to the UK
economy
 from 1990 until 2000. In general, the trend of all three types of
the
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apply
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contribution
 to the
economy
, there has been significant fluctuation but a considerable point
that is
 agriculture, in the first half of
century
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the century
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have
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has
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 had most sectors influenced
in
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by
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 U.K. economic development but
in contrast
at the end
 of the
century
 in the late twentieth
century
, business and financial sector was the major contributor of the
economy
. Agriculture in the first 25 years there was
increase
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increased
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 steeply and after that in over 75 years decrease dramatically
due to
 informed 2 % in 2000. Manufacturing during the period there has been no increase,
on the other hand
,
this
 rate falls gradually from 45% to15%.
Business
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The business
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 and financial services sector increased significantly by the end of the year reaching 30
percent
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per cent
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contribution
whereas
 in the
firs
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first
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 of the
century
 has had the least
contribution
 to the
economy
.
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