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Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others.To what extent is this style of management effective?Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard?

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In recent years, many companies developed a trend of providing extra money as an incentive to the staff to perform exceptionally fantastic. Many people think that it is a perfect way to
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 hardworking employees whereas some argue it to be a malpractice affecting the others detrimentally. The proponents of the former school of thought have obvious reasons for which the above practice holds benefits to the organization.
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, bonuses encourage the staff to work more towards the achievement of the goal. They receive a sense of satisfaction that their hard work is not getting wasted and is paying off for them well.
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 acts as a proper appreciation to those who push themselves more than the others. The employer provides an extra economic support to the ones who worked day and night and presented themselves in a unique manner that is going to turn advantageous to them only. In a recent survey conducted by a national business magazine of 2018, in India, 85% of the employees were delighted with their salary, bonuses accounting for 43% of the profit gained by the
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, the antagonists believe that there are many other ways to motivate the employees
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 as promotion and psychological boosts by worthy praise, get-togethers, parties and bonding sessions. Promoting the valuable assets of the
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 to a proper designation can create magic in the motivation levels. As a result, they work extra hard to achieve a much deserving
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, an appraisal of the
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 along with employer-employee bonding workshops help in the mental boosting
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 of positive yet competitive and constructive working environment, that in turn inspires a tension free performance benefitting the organization. As an instance, many famed multinational companies like TCS, India are following
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, it can be concluded,
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 providing financial
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 as an incentive, and has positive impacts in the form of employees encouragement and
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 appreciation, several other alternatives have been presented to us
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 as a rise in hierarchy level and worthy praise by the organization.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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