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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The report aims to provide information about how people in the United Kingdom, represented by
genders
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gender
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, pursued their higher
education
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 between 1970/71 and 1990/91 concerning the period of their study time. Generally, it is seen that the
number
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 of people who were studying part-time was relatively higher than those who enrolled the full-time
education
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. The majority of
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 graph experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the
number
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 of men in the part-time
further
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 study followed a downward trend. By the end of the period, female part-time pupils overshadow
those
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of
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male
students
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. Focusing on male
students
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, the
number
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 stood at 1000
thousand
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 for college
students
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 in a part-time class in 1970 and fluctuated during the period. By 1990, its
number
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 decreased slightly to approximately 900
thousand
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. The full-time
students
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,
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, tended to show a slight increase from only 100
thousand
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 in 1970/71 to over 200
thousand
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 in 1990/91. Over the 20 years, it is obvious that women seemed to continue their
further
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education
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 much higher. They showed significant growth in part-time
education
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, reached and outraced those of men in 1990 with over a million
students
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. The full-time
study's
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study
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students
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also
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 followed a relatively similar path.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, number, students, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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