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The chart below shows the results of a survey conducted in the UK in three different years regarding the level of interest in 6 particular sports. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey conducted in the UK in three different years regarding the level of interest in 6 particular sports. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given chart illustrates the percentage of
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interview
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 between British about certain types of likely sports from 1995 to 2005. It can be clearly seen from
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,
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 more British people surveyed preferred activities like
a
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football, rugby and tennis, but golf had
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 lowest percentage
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 the other five sports. As regards swimming and
volleyball
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 the numbers remained the same in
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 time. Football is
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 sport , which regarding by survey participants, accounted for about 50
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 in 2000, 48% in 2005 and 46
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 in 1995. It is followed closely by Rugby,
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decrease
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 slightly every year from 35
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 to 33
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 given dates. The higher number of people, who preferred tennis accounted
30
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percent
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 in 1995,
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 declined to 28 % in 2000, to 26
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 in 2004. The same result
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every year showed
sports
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for sports
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 like
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swimming and volleyball, the higher level was in 2005 approximately 30
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,
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than
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then
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 dropped to 29 % in 2005, to 28 % in 1995 relatively.
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