The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, from 1950 to 2005, Japan's
population
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increased modestly .
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2005 to 2015,
this
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decreased slowly and
then
predicts are said that Japan's
population
will be falling in the future. In 2055, their
population
could be 89.9
millions
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which
is
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less
more
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than
1950's
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the 1950's
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population
( 84.1
millions
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million
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).
Japanese
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higher
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number of
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population
in 2005 which is 127.8
millions
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.
Also
, in
table
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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of
population
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the population
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aged 65 years or over
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rose
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between 1950 and 2055
that
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shows us there will be more old people in Japan in the future years. In 2035, the number of older people will be the highest number in
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, it will be 37.2
millions
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.
Furthermore
, there will be
10
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times difference between
percentage
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the percentage
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of older people who are 65 years or over, in 1950 and in 2055.
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