The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, from 1950 to 2005, Japan's population
have
increased modestly . Unnecessary verb
apply
After
2005 to 2015, Change preposition
From
this
population
have
decreased slowly and Unnecessary verb
apply
then
predicts are said that Japan's population
will be falling in the future. In 2055, their population
could be 89.9 millions
which Change to singular
million
is
less Change the verb form
are
more
than Correct quantifier usage
apply
1950's
Correct article usage
the 1950's
population
( 84.1 millions
). Change to singular
million
Japanese
have Replace the word
Japan
higher
Add an article
a higher
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
population
in 2005 which is 127.8 millions
.
Change to singular
million
Also
, in table
, Add an article
the table
a table
percentage
of Correct article usage
the percentage
population
aged 65 years or over Correct article usage
the population
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
rose
between 1950 and 2055 Change the verb form
risen
that
shows us there will be more old people in Japan in the future years. In 2035, the number of older people will be the highest number in Correct pronoun usage
which
population
, it will be 37.2 Add an article
the population
millions
. Change to singular
million
Furthermore
, there will be 10
times difference between Correct article usage
a 10
percentage
of older people who are 65 years or over, in 1950 and in 2055.Add an article
the percentage
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