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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is climate changing. Now people are beginning to realize that global warming is
big
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a big problem
problem
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, which have every country. In
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 case, some people supposed that
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make world-wide in scope or application
globalized
 countries are liable to fight with
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.
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, others, myself included, support the opinion,
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entire, all
 planets humans are answerable for defensive and keeping safe the nature.
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, it is well known, that developing countries
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have
low-level condition
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a low-level condition
 than progressive countries. What I mean here is that
developed nations cause
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the developed nations cause
 of
poor economy
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a poor economy
 can not pay more attention to
environment
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the environment
 and combat climate changing. Due to the fact that their government struggled with more current difficulties like a lack of clean water, starving, wars with
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neighbouring
neighbourhood
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,
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make world-wide in scope or application
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 countries have more opportunities for
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solving
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. There are a couple
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reasons
. The most important factor is that progressive nations
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blame
 for surrounding pollution because they were able to build a bulk of factories and produce not environment-friendly products. In
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 context, I mean Industrialization process, which began in
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the 18th century
 in European countries and was
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first step
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the first step
a first step
, which lead to climate changing.
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, developing countries are much more successful in finance.
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, they can allow
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for
 research and find new ways to combat global warming. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis, we can say that the Earth is our main home for all countries and we all should protect the nature every day. When humans pay attention to surrounding every
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day, it
 can lead to
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better results
a better result
 than to avoid
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 and give the
responsible
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responsibility
 to progressive countries.
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