The following graphs illustrate electronic gaming trends in South Korea in 2006. The first outlines gamer age groups and gender demographics. The second indicates game type preference. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graphs show the trends of electronic gaming in South Korea in the year 2006. The first illustrates the proportion of females and males who played
games
according to
their ages
. While
the second
present the ratio of games
that are preferred among all gamers
.
Overall
, both genders who played games
accounted for the highest proportions were in their middle ages
. However
, the
role-playing Correct article usage
apply
games
were the most popular game between
all Change preposition
among
gamers
.
According to
the first graph, the percentages of males who played games
are higher than females in
all Change preposition
of
ages
. The proportion of girls in their 20 -29 years
stood at 10%, while
the lowest number was for the females who were more than 30 years
by less than 5%. Whereas
, the number of male gamers
increased gradually from ages
less than 12 years
to reach a peak at 20-29 years
by around 35%. This
percent
declined after Replace the word
percentage
age
Correct article usage
the age
30
Change preposition
of 30
years
to just over 10%.
As shown in the second
graph, it is clear that
the most played game between
all players was the Change preposition
among
role playing
Add a hyphen
role-playing
games
by slightly less than 50%. Fix the agreement mistake
game
While
action, simulation, and strategy games
preferred
by 20 %, 10%, and just under 20%, Add a missing verb
are preferred
by
Change preposition
of
the
Correct article usage
apply
gamers
, respectively.Submitted by randa.marwanz on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, ages, gamers, years with synonyms.
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