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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.
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The chart depicts the manufacturing and consumption of
oil
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 in China from 1982 until 2006. It is evident that
while
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 the production of
oil
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 rose at a steady rate, the consumption of fuel was increasing at a rapid pace. The extraction of fossil fuels could not keep up with the usage of the country. To elaborate, there was a sharp climb
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oil
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 production from the beginning of 1982 until 1986 from two
million
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 to three
million
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barrels
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 per day. After 1986, the number of
barrels
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 being manufactured only gradually increased for the next twenty years until it reached its peak of three and a half
million
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barrels
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 in 2006, the end of the graph.
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, starting from 1982, the consumption of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 barely grew for eighteen years.
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, the usage of
oil
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 was slightly below two
million
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barrels
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 per day
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 the beginning year of the graph and only rose to two
million
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 in 1990. From there, the rate began to significantly climb up until it reached a staggering amount of over six
million
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barrels
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 in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, million, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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