Some employers offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion

#employers #offer #employees #membership #gyms #sports #clubs #staff #work #benefit #arguments #aspects #debate #conclusion

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Nowadays, exploring various ways of achieving

work

Use synonyms

/life balance has become a widespread public debate. While some employers believe that offering subsidised gym and sport

clubs

Suggestion

club

club's

membership will have a positive effect on the

employees's

Suggestion

employees'

employee's

employee

health, and

subsequently

Linking Words

leading to a higher productivity at

work

Use synonyms

, others argue that there is no benefit in

this

Linking Words

approach. In

this

Linking Words

essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and show my support for the former view. On the one hand, those who believe that

this

Linking Words

kind of subsidising will not contribute to higher productivity, would argue that the direct effect of

this

Linking Words

approcah

move towards

approach

can not

cannot

be easily measured and there are not

enoough

as much as necessary

enough

evidence to support

this

Linking Words

. There are

probabely

with considerable certainty; without much doubt

probably

more well-proven perks than can be offered to employees to enhance their

perforamce

a dramatic or musical entertainment

performance

such

Linking Words

as target-based bonuses, incentives, on the job training.

In addition

Linking Words

, providing a

work

Use synonyms

/life balance environment in workplaces can have a

signifcant

important in effect or meaning

significant

impact on workers' mental and physical health.

Therefore

Linking Words

, some companies putting extra effort to achieve

this

Linking Words

by shortening working time

Accept space

banning sending or responding emails after working hours or even offering

work

Use synonyms

from

Suggestion

for

him.

As a result

Linking Words

, the employees have more time to plan exercise on their own time.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, in my view, offering financial

aids to

Accept comma addition

aids, to

staff will encourage employees to join different sport and health activities, and a result they will be more fit, both mentally and physically. Exercising before or after

work

Use synonyms

will help

releasing

Suggestion

to release

stress, and

therefore

Linking Words

workforce

Suggestion

the workforce

can concentrate better on the performing their tasks. The recent study conducted by

harvard

American philanthropist who left his library and half his estate to the Massachusetts college that now bears his name (1607-1638)

Harvard

university revealed that individuals who are exercising regularly, will be more motivated and more enthusiastic to

acheive

to gain with effort

achieve

their goal, personally and professionally.

Moreover

Linking Words

this

Linking Words

will be a way of showing that companies care for their staff. In

conculsion

a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration

conclusion

conciliation

Although

Linking Words

there are better ways to increase staff's performance in a company, I believe that subsidising gym and other sport clubs can be beneficial to both companies and individual workforces.

Submitted by krishk329 on Sat May 16 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

9
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

328 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

subsidized membership
physical activity
energy levels
employee productivity
work performance
sick leaves
healthier lifestyle
absenteeism
employee morale
workplace environment
employee retention
corporate image
branding
health and wellness benefits
top talent
healthcare costs
medical intervention
lack of usage
underutilization
alternative wellness programs
mental health resources
flexible working hours
professional development
individual responsibility
corporate responsibility

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

<4
band
Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Although many people believe that men are more successfull than woman, I disagree this to a large extent for some reasons. My inclination is justified in the following paragraphs.
5.5
band
It is common aspiration among many young peopleto run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?
Recent times have, no doubt, witnessed that youth do not want to work under any employer and instead, they have a very high desire to start their own line of something to make money. While, there are many possible reasons which fascinate young individuals towards this idea, one can not ignore the disadvantages. In my point of view, there are several downsides to this approach which will be discussed in this essay.
8
band
Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or travel. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In this fast-paced society, while the educational gap broadens many graduates’ appeal, others have an adverse opinion. From my perspective, taking a gap year before attending university has more drawbacks than benefits.
7.5
band
Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In recent years, most industries have tended to change the packaging to be sustainable. Personally, I insist that it is the responsibility of customers to influence eco-friendly products and businesses; support will be illustrated in the following paragraph:
7
band
The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?
The damage to the natural environment increased alongside the growth of consumer goods production. Product packaging wastes and the unprocessed chemical materials involved in production processes are the main key factors why this issue happened. Government involvement is crucial in solving this issue by establishing sets of regulations to govern the consumer goods industry.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is common aspiration among many young peopleto run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or travel. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?