Some employers offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion

Nowadays, exploring various ways of achieving
work
/life balance has become a widespread public debate. While some employers believe that offering subsidised gym and sport
clubs
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club
club's
membership will have a positive effect on the
employees's
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employees'
employee's
employee
health, and
subsequently
leading to a higher productivity at
work
, others argue that there is no benefit in
this
approach. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and show my support for the former view. On the one hand, those who believe that
this
kind of subsidising will not contribute to higher productivity, would argue that the direct effect of
this
approcah
move towards
approach
can not
can not
cannot
be easily measured and there are not
enoough
as much as necessary
enough
evidence to support
this
. There are
probabely
with considerable certainty; without much doubt
probably
more well-proven perks than can be offered to employees to enhance their
perforamce
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
,
such
as target-based bonuses, incentives, on the job training.
In addition
, providing a
work
/life balance environment in workplaces can have a
signifcant
important in effect or meaning
significant
impact on workers' mental and physical health.
Therefore
, some companies putting extra effort to achieve
this
by shortening working time
,
Accept space
,
banning sending or responding emails after working hours or even offering
work
from
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for
him.
As a result
, the employees have more time to plan exercise on their own time.
On the other hand
, in my view, offering financial
aids to
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aids, to
staff will encourage employees to join different sport and health activities, and a result they will be more fit, both mentally and physically. Exercising before or after
work
will help
releasing
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to release
stress, and
therefore
,
workforce
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the workforce
can concentrate better on the performing their tasks. The recent study conducted by
harvard
American philanthropist who left his library and half his estate to the Massachusetts college that now bears his name (1607-1638)
Harvard
university revealed that individuals who are exercising regularly, will be more motivated and more enthusiastic to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
their goal, personally and professionally.
Moreover
,
this
will be a way of showing that companies care for their staff. In
conculsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
,
Although
there are better ways to increase staff's performance in a company, I believe that subsidising gym and other sport clubs can be beneficial to both companies and individual workforces.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidized membership
  • physical activity
  • energy levels
  • employee productivity
  • work performance
  • sick leaves
  • healthier lifestyle
  • absenteeism
  • employee morale
  • workplace environment
  • employee retention
  • corporate image
  • branding
  • health and wellness benefits
  • top talent
  • healthcare costs
  • medical intervention
  • lack of usage
  • underutilization
  • alternative wellness programs
  • mental health resources
  • flexible working hours
  • professional development
  • individual responsibility
  • corporate responsibility
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