The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below illustrates the
consumption
of
fish
and some diverse
sort
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of meat in a European country between 19V9 and Y..E.
According to
the table
fish
diagram had steady changes. Lamb
consumption
has rapidly decreased.
Beef
consumption
had
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dramatically increased in twenty-five years. And
the
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chicken
consumption
is the only meat that has increased in
this
time period.
According to
the graph
Beef
and chicken had markable changes in
this
time period.
Fish
and Lamb had slightly changed. It
also
shows that in the
beginning
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the
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beef
had the highest
consumption
with two hindered thirty and
fish
was the lowest sixty- five.
Beef
and lamb
consumption
are
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started in the middle of the diagram with hindered fifty
consumption
per week.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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