The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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indicted
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the number of men and women in
further
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the further
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course
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in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time in
a
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time period of 1970/71 to 1990/91. At first glance, we can be seen that full-time schooling
trends
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to
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increase every year in females and males by the contrast priory class
were
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fluctuated by starting at one million in 1970/1971 falls to nine thousand in 1980/1981
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rose to nine hundred fifty in 1990/91.
On the other hand
, the
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part-time application
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originated
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seven hundred eighty thousand in 1970/1971
climbed
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up to eight hundred eighty-eight in 1980/81.
Lastly
, the female part-time education was one million and one people. In conclusion, there are a number of part-time learning higher than full-time in
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genders.
Moreover
, we can assume that when the time
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changed, people are more interested in applying for a long-time course.
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