Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weakness. Is it right to exclude males and females from certain professions because of their gender?

Men and women should not be excluded on the basis of gender from certain professions. Unlike other men, females may have both
strengths
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strength
and
weakness but
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weakness, but
should not be prohibited for occupation because the
wiling
disposed or inclined toward
willing
wailing
-power is more important to achieve goal or to get work done rather strengths. Nowadays, women are grown-up with
strong mentality
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a strong mentality
and
intelligency
the ability to comprehend; to understand and profit from experience
intelligence
as well, so that they are capable to the group in a good way.
Moreover
,
female
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the female
seems better understanding with the stakeholders. As
a
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an
example, a report published by the Forbes Magazine recently, there are three
females
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female
entrepreneur out of five selected under thirty entrepreneur from Nepal. It is not advisable
to
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for
employers to hire only a male employee just because of gender because
woman
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the woman
seems quite more responsible on their duties and subordinates and senior as well. A survey conducted by the Oxford University in 2018, found that 40 % of most prestigious awarded companies have
female CEO
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female CEOs
a female CEO
. In conclusion, male and female should not be excluded for their occupation because it is believed that higher willing power make them more responsible towards their
duties and
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duties, and
they can achieve a professional goals in their interested field of occupation which reflect (lead) a company to the success.
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