the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
The picture demonstrates the rate of English
students
who were could able to communicate in
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language
in 2000 and 2010.
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,
Spanish
learners took most of the
students
. In ten years, it can
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that
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who can speak German’s percentage didn’t change at all
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to
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. The year 2000 was the time
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one fifth
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of the
students
in British can only
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their mother tongue but it reduced by half in a decade.
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of
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who could see speak German was equal in both years at 10%. Compare to ten years ago, French learners dropped by 5% to 10% in 2010.
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that other
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listed and
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that achieved two
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communicating
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all went up by 5%. At the start of the
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century, 30% of British
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fluency
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, the rate of
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that know two languages was
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the
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language
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15%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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