the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The given charts compare the percentages of British undergraduates who could speak more than one
language
in a specific university in the and 2010 respectively. At the first glance,
it is clear that
Spanish was by far the most spoken
language
beside
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English
in
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that university.
Moreover
,
students
became interested in
other
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another language
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language
over the period of 10 years.
According to
the charts, in 2000, 30% of
students
were able to communicate in Spanish only, which doubled
than
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that figure for French
speaks
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, followed by 10% of
students
who could
spoke
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German fluently. In the
next
ten years, the number of speaking
students
increased a fall
whereas
the data for
German fluent
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students
remained unchanged. The table data clearly show that the number of
students
knowing at least one other
language
beside
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their mother tongue rose to 20% from 15%.
Furthermore
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15% of
student
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students
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were trilingual in the year 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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