These graphs represents the in statistic of population numbers in Japan. It is clear from graphs that the highest propotion was in 2005 over the period given, and the lowest figure was in 1950.

These graphs represents the in statistic of population numbers in Japan. It is clear from graphs that the highest propotion was in 2005 over the period given, and the lowest figure was in 1950.
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of population
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in Japan. It is clear from
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the graphs
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that the highest
propotion
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proportion
was in 2005 over the period given, and the lowest figure was in 1950.
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shown
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from 1950 to 1990 there was an increase
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regularly
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then
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twenty
five between 1990 and 2015 the
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proportion
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growth.
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numbers
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will change, and going to drop until 2055. Focusing on
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that illustrates the
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of older people who
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65 age or over in 1950,
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, 25.7
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and 20.0
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in
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respectively
. But in the
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more, in 2035
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almost 37.2
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nearly 34.0 (
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) of inhabitance will be old.
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numbers
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of
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population going to go down slightly, and will be around 36.5
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equal
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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