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These graphs represents the in statistic of population numbers in Japan. It is clear from graphs that the highest propotion was in 2005 over the period given, and the lowest figure was in 1950.

These graphs represents the in statistic of population numbers in Japan. It is clear from graphs that the highest propotion was in 2005 over the period given, and the lowest figure was in 1950.
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These graphs
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 the
in
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statistic
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the statistic
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 of population
numbers
 in Japan. It is clear from
graphs
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the graphs
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 that the highest
propotion
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proportion
 was in 2005 over the period given, and the lowest figure was in 1950.
According to
 what bar
char
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chart
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shown
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 from 1950 to 1990 there was an increase
regualary
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regularly
,
then
 moving to
next
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the next
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towenty
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twenty
 five between 1990 and 2015 the
propontion
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proportion
 of people was
slightly
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 growth.
While
this
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these
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numbers
 will change, and going to drop until 2055. Focusing on
table
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the table
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 that illustrates the
numbers
 of older people who
was
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were
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in
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65 age or over in 1950,
there
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 figures
was
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were
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 4.1
milllions
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million
millions
, 25.7
milliions
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millions
million
 almost 4.9
percent
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per cent
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 and 20.0
pecent
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per cent
 in
prespectifly
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respectively
. But in the
future
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 the expectation point to
rise
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 more, in 2035
at
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almost 37.2
millions
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million
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 nearly 34.0 (
percen
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per cent
) of inhabitance will be old.
Afterthat
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 in the
next
towenty
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twenty
 years the trend
say
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 the
numbers
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number
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 of
elder
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the elder
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 population going to go down slightly, and will be around 36.5
millions
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million
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equall
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equal
41.0
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to 41.0
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%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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